Show Don’t Tell

showing reader something not telling them.
actions, thoughts, feeling, relationships
creates deeper connections with reader
use the senses to create a picture:
taste, touch, sight, sound, smell

His vision blurred as he felt his eyes start to fill with a salty tears, subconsciously he noticed, his mouth go dry as his lip started to tremble, and like a switch he did not have control over, tears like rivers began to roll down his pale cheeks.

Just like every morning, I wake up to the usual sound of my dogs dog breath smelling breathing, without even opening my eyes I can feel his piercing eyes cutting holes in me as he sits at my door, staring expectantly at me with anticipation for our morning ritual, with a whine of annoyance from him I get up.

The second she wrapped her arms around him, and buried her face in his old, worn jacket she was overwhelmed by smell of smoke filling her lungs, threatening to choke .

the moment I stepped outside, the overwhelming coldness of the air was a punch in the face,

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